Post by oceanangel on Jun 5, 2008 13:38:52 GMT 1
Thanks for your comments Eugene, insight was well helpful!
In regards to punctuation my grammar's not great and sometimes think it lets others put there own take on it when they are reading in their head. Same with counting the syllables, i really dont get it. but just for you ive tried ! here goes
Unnatural, the adult look of
bewildered shock
on a childs face,
and the vulnerable weeping
of a mature teen,
wise beyond her years.
Love circulates, around
the room, rejecting fear
with every laboured breath.
Pinched faces, suddenly
appear older and paler,
kindred, a silent family
marooned. An island
of epiphanies.
Getting there?
In regards to punctuation my grammar's not great and sometimes think it lets others put there own take on it when they are reading in their head. Same with counting the syllables, i really dont get it. but just for you ive tried ! here goes
Unnatural, the adult look of
bewildered shock
on a childs face,
and the vulnerable weeping
of a mature teen,
wise beyond her years.
Love circulates, around
the room, rejecting fear
with every laboured breath.
Pinched faces, suddenly
appear older and paler,
kindred, a silent family
marooned. An island
of epiphanies.
Getting there?