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Post by eugene on May 24, 2008 22:25:16 GMT 1
Not sure of this, the last line makes it seem like it might be intended as a joke, but the rest of it doesn't. Is it? It is written in very standard phrases but not cliched enough for a reader/listener to get it if it's what's intended. Hope this is helpful.
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Post by pearcec on May 26, 2008 19:29:43 GMT 1
I think it needs a lot of work, thanks for the advice.
The poem is supposed to illustrate emotions that I had felt so strongly for so long that I began to feel as if I was the only one ever to have felt them. The idea of 'cliche' was simply my realisation that what I was feeling wasnt very different from what anyone else might feel had they lost someone. Although it seems to be misleading.
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